Martians aren't the only ones who wear masks to voice an opinion, project an image, broadcast an emotion. Feel it then forget it. Let regret burn hot across the cheek, chilling the soul, drilling a hole in your chest. It’s real because you imagined it. The next thunderclap will rattle that mask right off your face. All the planning under the stars won’t reveal any secrets, and the hymnbook is hiding in the mountains. It’s all tuneless music from now on. Jagged chords have carved you up, parceled you out, and tossed you in the canal.
Your transformation into moonglow and shadow is now complete!
Below are the peer assessments for my Unit 8 assignment ~
FORM
student1 → I have to give you a 3, I don´t see any major grammatical issues, it is well written, showing good vocabulary skills. For me it could flow better, but that is subjective.
student3 → Very strong essay. Thesis is clearly defined. Essay is interesting to read. Good word choice. Essay form is clearly laid.
student4 → Your thesis statement is clear, but you need to work on making your three key terms flow and connect better.
Score from your peers: 2
CONTENT
student1 → 3 Even though I disagree with you :) it is built very nicely and quite original point of view.
student3 → Interesting examination of truth vs reality. Very good selection of examples, all lending aid to central thesis. Also does very well to expand upon the ideas with analysis instead of just throwing examples at the thesis. Not sure I agree that -all- the stories in the book speak to acceptance of some person's reality, but you give a convincing argument for this example.
student4 → You chose a good, interesting subject, one that takes us into the meaning and symbolism of the story. Continuing to look for and analyze underlying themes will make your assignments useful to your fellow students.
Score from your peers: 2.5
Please write here any other comments which you feel might be of use to you or the writer of this essay.
student1 → Maybe wait those two days with putting your work on the web so people won´t be worried that it is plagiarism :)
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